Below is the second draft of our main task. There is still a couple of things missing, such as the voice over and some of the shots of the newspapers need to be put in a more chronological order, despite that this is a great improvement to our first edit.
As you can see from in the screenshot below, the timeline of our sequence is now filled. this was the main issue in our last edit as we had a lot of gaps with no footage. However, Gabby got the footage of the newspapers and erin got the footage of the pictures of the girls on the wall, so I was therefore able to fill the timeline with footage.
However, although all the clips are now in place, there is still work to be done. For example, we need to change the order of the shots of the newspapers, and we still have missing footage of the voice over.
For feedback this time round, we decided to again utilize google classroom and our classmates, but instead of asking for general feedback, (as we already received this) we asked specific questions:
- What did you like about the title sequence?
- What would you highlight as the main improvement?
- Please comment on the mise-en-scene (good/bad)
- What genre would this belong to?
Here are some of the comments we got from our classmates…
What we noticed from the feedback is that we have done a good job of presenting the sub genre we were going for, as most people labelled it a crime thriller.
The main improvement overall was to add more shots, and this will be done once we add the voice over.