And here is the 4th draft!
What I worked on in this edit was really speeding up the shots of the newspapers, to make the sequence that little bit faster, making it more engage-able and enigmatic for the audience.
I also responded to our feedback from the last draft and changed the style of our font to make a better match to our genre of thriller. The font is now more bold and strong, as opposed to the curly text we had in the previous draft. This is a much better text as it is better associated with the thriller genre. I did not get this text off a website like the previous text, instead I chose one from the vast amount of preset texts on Premiere.
The main improvement we have is to get the voice over done. we are planning to get this filmed very shortly and should be included in the next draft.